Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
Improving Skills - Part 6 by BCRich40 Improving Skills - Part 6 by BCRich40
Here is the sixth part of my first pony comic series. I'm not very happy with it though. There was a lot of problems when I was drawing this part, but I finally managed to put it together.

And my English is still pretty poor, so feel free to point out any grammar mistakes you can find.

PART 7

PART 5

PART 1


My Little Pony Hasbro
Add a Comment:
 
:icondeli73123:
deli73123 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I don't know what you're talking about; your English is actually really good.
Reply
:icon1cosmiconsciousness:
1cosmiconsciousness Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
How is your english better than mine, and english is my first language?
Reply
:iconcommode7x:
commode7x Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
Because you're American
Reply
:iconsushero:
sushero Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
rich dont give her medicine if you arent a doctor xD   or i mean  hemm veterinarian
and not less important good  work bro  nice comic  ^^
Reply
:iconshadowdancerbrony:
ShadowDancerBrony Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
Your English is doing well and I'm enjoying your work greatly.
Reply
:iconsuperbrony79:
SuperBrony79 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your English is avtually rather good in all these, one small thing tho:

"You actually drunk more than one mug of cider, but the answer is: yes"

Is a little bit awkward and the colon is not needed. I ma recommend changing it to

"You actually drunk more than one mug of cider, but yeah."
Anyway, this comic is great, and good luck!
Reply
:iconsuperbrony79:
SuperBrony79 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*actually
Reply
:icontwily469:
Twily469 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
XD
Reply
:iconisseus:
Isseus Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
Oh dear god don't use Panadol for a hangover! It causes liver damage if you still have alcohol in your system. Use ibuprofene or ketoprofene instead!
Reply
:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Panadol doesn't have shit on oxycodone.
Reply
:iconsweetymimy22:
sweetymimy22 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA OOOOHHHhhh Man 
Reply
:iconstassy-ifox3:
Stassy-IFOX3 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This comic was a brilliant idea!! XD Good work!
Reply
:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Do they have Panadol in Equestria? One of the many mysteries of life.
Reply
:iconalexkazhdan:
AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm pretty sure they don't. But they're not in Equestria at the moment. ;)
Reply
:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
Ah, good point. :)
Reply
:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Panadol? That's European.
Reply
:iconmysticeden:
MysticEden Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Panadol? Lol perfecto!
Reply
:iconocarinaplaya:
Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
I like this series.
Reply
:iconmoonsugar33:
moonsugar33 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Yay someone else who knows what Panadol is!
Reply
:iconcmc--scootaloo:
CMC--Scootaloo Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hilarious so far! And a very creative idea to show your progress in drawing explained through a comic!
I'm excited to see how this goes on. :D
Reply
:iconponkool4:
Ponkool4 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
"And guess what it says about..." I wonder what she was going to say...
I had to look up what panadol is. Where I live, we call it Tylenol or acetaminophen.
Reply
:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Same here.
Reply
:icontruecere:
truecere Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
this and all parts are what i call 5th wall 5th wall is when you show knowledge of your creator or talk about other univi . if you want an example watch the first ep of the new power rangers
Reply
:iconhors1988:
Hors1988 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
hahahahahahaha
Reply
:iconcatz537:
catz537 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Panel 4: Dash should say "What was in that cider?" and also "And last, but not least..."
Reply
:icongarciarael:
garciarael Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
What's Panadol?
Reply
:iconradoxeald:
Radoxeald Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Painkiller brand.
Reply
:icongarciarael:
garciarael Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
Oh.
Reply
:iconevilbob0:
Evilbob0 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
Noooooo...! Don't give RD acute liver failure!!!
Reply
:iconfilukisu:
filukisu Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lmao "panadol?" I love this!
Reply
:iconbrokengrayheart:
BrokenGrayHeart Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
She will learn the way of the human.
Reply
:iconneutralbrony:
Neutralbrony Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
SO MANY QUESTIONS IN THIS PLOT!
Reply
:iconrazorsharpfang:
razorsharpfang Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Panel 2, Twilight: "You actually drank more than one cider, but the answer is: yes."
should be: "You actually drank more than one mug of cider, but the answer is: yes"
or, if you prefer: "You actually drank a lot more cider than that, but the answer is: yes"
or, just to be funny: "You actually consumed a significantly larger quantity of cider than you claim to have consumed, but the answer to your question is still yes."

Panel 3, Twilight: "Although, this book is weird. It tells about strange planets, animals and many other things"
Eh. 'Tells' is probably not the right word in this context. You could use 'speaks of' instead of 'tells about', although that's speaking figuratively. Books can't actually talk...

And a drawing constructive criticism:
Twilight's eyes are definitely different to rainbow's and others, but her eyes are circular based with one point, towards the snout. You've designed her eyes with 2 points, but this is not reflected in the show, or any other high-quality fan-art I've seen. There's nothing essentially wrong with it, You can keep drawing this way if you wish, but if you want to stay true to the style in the show, you may want to reduce the number of points in her eye.

Keep it up. :D
Reply
:iconbcrich40:
BCRich40 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And again, thank you. I fixed those things.

And as I said, I'm not really happy with this part. I actually made sketches for the part a long time ago, but my style has changed significantly after that. So the end result is mix up of old and new style. And to be honest, it looks like shit.

But those eyes have always been a problem. I just must keep practicing.
Reply
:iconrazorsharpfang:
razorsharpfang Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
That's what posting on deviantart is for!
Reply
:iconbb-k:
BB-K Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lol, grab a pill, RD. Then you'll be over, but don't overdose, or you're gonna :iconpillshereplz:
Reply
:icongreenrob:
Greenrob Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
another good job my friend
Reply
:iconkonics:
konics Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
nice
Reply
:iconvioletdragonian:
VioletDragonian Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks great ^_^ the dialog seems fine, except for when Dash says, "What was in those ciders and how many I drank them?" instead she should say, "What was in those ciders and how many did I drink?" and when Twilight says, "What it says?" instead she should say, "What does it say?"
Hope this helps, nice job on it by the way.
Reply
:iconbcrich40:
BCRich40 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I knew that there was something wrong with those sentences. Thank you!
Reply
:iconvioletdragonian:
VioletDragonian Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I like helping out where I can ^_^
Those were just simple grammatical mistakes, your English is otherwise extremely good.
Reply
:iconateck5:
ateck5 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you asked for it :D panel 3: guess instead of quess :3
still epic comic though
Reply
:iconbcrich40:
BCRich40 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! I must fix that immediately.
Reply
:iconateck5:
ateck5 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome :3
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×




Details

Submitted on
May 10, 2012
Image Size
1.1 MB
Resolution
793×3321
Link
Thumb
Embed

Stats

Views
28,684 (5 today)
Favourites
192 (who?)
Comments
44
Downloads
173
×