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Improving Skills - Part 3 by BCRich40 Improving Skills - Part 3 by BCRich40
The Third part of my first pony comic.

I think my English is poor, so I apologize in advance. Feel free to point out errors.

PART 4

PART 2

PART 1


My Little Pony © Hasbro
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:iconilovemyfavoritegames:
ilovemyfavoritegames Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
well ur right but thats not me
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:iconserefin99:
Serefin99 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Guys, stop staring at me. If I had drawn you, you wouldn't even have mouths. Be grateful.
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:iconbubblized:
bubblized Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
... don`t look at me. DON`T LOOK AT MMEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!
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:iconprincessjulliet123:
princessjulliet123 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
BREAKING THE FOURTH WALL!! I thought pinkie was the only one who could do that lol!
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:iconbronygamergirl2001:
BronyGamerGirl2001 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014
Me too.
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:iconnathanl9:
nathanl9 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2015
don't worry about that, Pinkie Pie decided to troll everyone out here by teaching them how to break it along with teaching everypony the art of trolling us even in our comics -.- at least thats what I think has happened.
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:iconsushero:
sushero Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
she seee usssss aaaaaaaaaaaaaaa   Forth wall brokenn    Pinkiii save ussss
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:iconbellekitten:
Bellekitten Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
and then they understand why pinkie is pinkie 
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:icondemongaara105:
demongaara105 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Fourth wall!You're breaking the fourth wall!
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:iconnova225:
Nova225 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
They have become aware !

Shutdown the Matrix !
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:iconroadieturbo:
RoadieTurbo Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
oh crap they know we're here everyone hide! lol
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:iconghalaghor:
Ghalaghor Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
aaaaand there goes the fourth wall. i call dibs on the broken pieces.
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:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That whole gag isn't funny anymore.
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:iconghalaghor:
Ghalaghor Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
but i need pieces of the fourth wall for magic and sience!
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:iconroadieturbo:
RoadieTurbo Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
*grabs the broken pieces and runs off*
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:iconghalaghor:
Ghalaghor Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
*puts the other broken pieces away before you can steal them too* the fourth wall s veeery big so there should be enough shards for everyone.
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:iconroadieturbo:
RoadieTurbo Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
awwww...*pouts slightly* you had some left..
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:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*science

No. Not funny.
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:iconghalaghor:
Ghalaghor Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
sorry, i have this bad habbit of typing too fast on my keyboard which causes some errors sometimes...
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:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Typing fast is good. Typing fast and accurate is better.
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:iconghalaghor:
Ghalaghor Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
i wish we could edit our comments on deviantart...like on other sites.
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:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
True dat
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:iconwilson8787:
Wilson8787 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Dat derpy dash face in panel two. :D
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:iconmuddyfudger:
MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Where's pinkie pie? I'd have thought she would be all over this.
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:iconponymystic:
PonyMystic Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol XD
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:iconlunastudios90:
lunastudios90 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
  my inglish is poor too. don´t worry darling :D 

un comic genial con todas las letras! estaba pensando hacer un comic como este. pero, al parecer ya hiciste uno como este. xD  yeah, anyways a reaaaaaaallllllyyy creative comic :D
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:iconxormak:
xormak Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pinkie tey are stealing your job...
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:iconalexkazhdan:
AlexKazhdan Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconpinkiepiegaspplz:
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:iconxormak:
xormak Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconmlpspikeplz: I know, can you believe it?
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:iconfirestorm310:
firestorm310 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
Lol yes yes
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:iconponkool4:
Ponkool4 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Hilarious! This is good concept, with a lot of potential
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:icondavionx:
DavionX Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
:iconwhatisthisshitplz:
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:iconfotland42:
fotland42 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Didn't anypony tell you two never to look directly at the camera?
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:iconroadieturbo:
RoadieTurbo Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
apparately not XD
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:iconprincesssilverglow:
PrincessSilverGlow Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is such an awesome idea and I enjoying reading this :3
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:iconfatalerror328:
fatalerror328 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I am liking this)
Cool idea and by far interesting implementation.
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:iconthe-only-nyx-sparkle:
ROFL 2 last panels made me laugh hard.
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:iconmdb45424:
mdb45424 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012
lol this gives me an idea pinkie piegiving a tutirol on how to draw ponies to the fourth wall
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:icongreenrob:
Greenrob Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
you did well with this one
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razorsharpfang Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Let's see....
Panel1: need a comma between hallucinating and or,
"Am I hallucinating, or did your style just change?"

Panel2:.........

Twilight's speech: Revise Structure. The entire structure of the sentence is a little out of whack. Possible alternatives:
"Heh, this is just like following someone when they're improving their drawing skills!"
"Heh, this is just like following someone when he's improving his drawing skills!"
um... you really need an object after 'following' so we know WHAT the're following.
Also, "He's" means: "He is", because it's abbreviated, or made shorter.
You want "His" which means that the skills are his, or that they belong to him. You could also use they're/their to be gender-neutral. (don't know if boy/girl)

Rainbow Dash's speech: First two sentences are good. You used the right he's/his.
"How silly idea!" isn't quite correct, "idea" is a noun, must have a particle. ("The" or "a")
I also don't think "How" is the right word to use either. How is usually used to indicated a question of method. ("How did he do that?")
I would use this: "Such a silly idea!", or if you REALLY want to use "how" you could do this: "How silly of an idea is that?", but that's a bit big.

Once again, don't get disheartened, you learn the most when you make mistakes, so think about how much you're learning! :D
Keep up the good work, keep deviating! :D
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ElleArt14 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Nice :D
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